think i would start with action (in the words) and then let the story unfold...maybe get creative with the font a bit more...start with that face instead of the hands and then bring in the hands...just a few thoughts...
I'm intrigued by the title! I like the music in the trailer, and that it's a nice length too!
Another intriguing one
Interesting book trailer! I like the music, too!
This is a whole new world to me! I did like the trailer and its music.